Day 14 :: 30 Poems in 30 Days April 2016

Silent Space, April 14, 2016, 30 Poems in 30 Days

Silent Space, April 14, 2016, 30 Poems in 30 Days

Silent Space, April 14, 2016
I went back to the park and as soon as I opened the hatch door, the poem was waiting on me. I typed it out and then enjoyed the scene for a while. Nature is so wonderful.

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One Response to Day 14 :: 30 Poems in 30 Days April 2016

  1. Michiel Carlier says:

    P30X Day 14

    I am again struck by the magnificence of your work Stephanie. Your mind is a wonder, and I want to know it better. This poem is nothing short of amazing to me. I love it, love it, love it. You seem to be able to keep up your high level of poetry writing, and along the way reach even higher levels. At first view, Silent Space looks like a relatively simple visual poem with a nice twist. But it is much harder to write it than people might think. Imagine, you wrote a poem about silent space…how is this even possible!
    To show you what I mean, I’ll do what this poem does and create a contrast in which I can place it.

    Imagine an art teacher standing in front of a class, explaining about writing poetry. “Start your poem by finding an object to write about. If your object for example is a table, than you go and sit in front of this table with your pen and paper. Now, you observe this table, or this car or whatever you chose to write about, and you look at it in an observing way. Just start with writing down words that describe the table, like how it has four legs, maybe it has three, and so on. What is this table made of, what color does it have, and so on. Then, write about where it stands, on what kind of surface. Then, think about who made it, and who uses it now. In this way, you set your mind to finding words for the object of your poem. That is how you start your poem”.
    Two weeks later everybody gets their poem assignment back from the teacher. “Class, I see you all remembered to start your poem with choosing an object to write about. Well done! Take Jasper for example, I liked your poem about your dad’s car. Can I ask you to read it in front of the class? Stephanie, your poem about Silent Space is on another level, I can’t ask you to read it in front of class, but I would love to show it on the screen so that we can see how to write a poem about something abstract”.

    I think it is much harder to write about something as abstract as time. The poem seems to have to follow the necessity to give time a certain form the reader can refer to, like a bowling ball. Something that is not an object will almost certainly become an object when put into words. With this poem, I see that it is also possible to write about something that is not an object, without making it into an object in order for the reader to understand. Thank you Stephanie, I didn’t know that. I would like to know how you found the object of your poem. Your discoveries go beyond my imagination. Your new assignment for next week is to write a poem about an emotion, without reference to objects. Maybe next years challenge will have a poem like that. Looking forward to it :)

    In your journal you seem to be a little nonchalant about the way in which you received this poem: it was just waiting on you when you opened the hatch door, and the only thing you had to do was type it out. I wonder how that is possible. It seems to me that things are not what they seem with the simplicity of this poem. In the beginning of my P30X I mentioned that I thought most of your poems have a deeper meaning still to be discovered.

    I set out to find something on a deeper level with Silent Space. What I notice at first is that you use the title of your first poem ‘Start Here’ to create Silent Space. When I look at the date of your first poem of April I notice you wrote it on the first of April. And on April the fourteenth you went back to the park and started to write this poem. I could be a coincidence that this poem received you today, or maybe it was not so coincidental…
    The originality of this poem seems to be in the fact that you added one extra space in-between the lines, and with great result. The two words that are repeated are of course separated by a space. It is the extra space that gives this poem its uniqueness, and that gives it the style we are used from your poems.

    In your poem, it is magnificent how its object is integrated in its visual effect: the little space that moves through the body of the poem, the many lines of ‘start here’. And without the original space in-between the two words, it wouldn’t have the same effect either. So every line has two spaces.
    The silent space can only be seen because of the words that it divides, just like the universe can only be seen because of the stars that are in it. I notice that, to create contrast for the silent space, you repeated those two words eleven times. It is the extra space in the lines that make this poem, but it is not just the extra space itself. It is the way how it shifts forward one time that create its dynamics. Without the silent space shifting forward every other line, it wouldn’t create its visual effect.
    Looking at the poem with a clinical eye, I notice that one line, including dot, counts ten characters. Since this poem has eleven lines it has one hundred and ten characters in total, not including the spaces. Furthermore, I notice that the four words on top of the poem seems to together very well; Stephanie Strange’s Silent Space. Four words all starting with an S.

    Let’s make up the count so far. These are all the elements of your poem under each other with their numbers:

    On the first of April you write Start Here 0401
    You add one extra space in-between the lines 1
    In total this poem has one hundred and ten characters 110
    On April fourteenth you write Silent Space 0414
    Every line has two spaces 00
    In this poem ‘start here’ is repeated eleven times 11
    The extra space shifts forward one character 1
    Including dot ’start here.’ counts ten characters 10
    Four words go together; Stephanie Strange’s Silent Space 4
    The object of this poem is silent space 0

    The magnificence of this poem is in the balance as well. Its symmetry is seen when I place all its numbers behind each other:
    040111100414001111040

    Very well done Stephanie. Your poem is a masterpiece. And I think it is fair to say that a beautifully balanced piece of music that reveals greatness goes together with it:
    ‘Households’ by Sleeping At Last. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4SjHY54BwUc, that shows how the balance

    Michiel